Update: What improvements did I make to my second draft?

• Some of the improvements I made were that I have added more superimposes. For example "There will be Nowhere to run" etc. It helped build up tension and it worked well with the music.
• I added most of my footage. So unlike the first trailer which really comprised of one scene, by adding the rest of my work it helps to show that there is actually a story behind it.
• I tried to shorten the timing of the establishing shots. This was because before it was too long and was slowing down the pace of the trailer too much.
• The stutter effect that I used in the first draft I increased the pace of it. This helped to make it have more of an impact.